I really like the phrase "sounds like a group of violins..." as I can imagine a really sad piece of music playing. And "looks like everything is gone from me..." is VERY sad. You have some powerful writing here Shyarn. Keep it up! Mrs Burt
You have some really good ideas about the theme of 'sadness'. I also like the line "sounds like a group of violins" because it reminds me of a sad scene from a movie where violin's are playing.
Hey Shyarn I really like your poem about sea salt shyarn.And looks like everything is gone from me,very sad.keep it up and I can't wait for your next poem.
I really like the phrase "sounds like a group of violins..." as I can imagine a really sad piece of music playing. And "looks like everything is gone from me..." is VERY sad. You have some powerful writing here Shyarn. Keep it up!
ReplyDeleteMrs Burt
Watz up shyarn I love reading your poem about sadness
ReplyDeleteKeep up the good work
Wow Shyarn! I loved your poem. The way you've described sadness worked well in that it reminded me of what it's like to feel sad.
ReplyDeleteI do hope you get to post another piece soon.
Mrs Tele'a
You have some really good ideas about the theme of 'sadness'. I also like the line "sounds like a group of violins" because it reminds me of a sad scene from a movie where violin's are playing.
ReplyDeleteGood work Shyarn.
Hey Shyarn
ReplyDeleteI really like your poem about sea salt shyarn.And looks like everything is gone from me,very sad.keep it up and I can't wait for your next poem.
Rose
Hi Shyarn !
ReplyDeleteNice poem ! Really liked it how you described sadness good :)
Good job !
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